Serial Fiction Beta Reads

Seed, Part 10

Everyone’s a Critic

Steve Fendt
5 min readNov 9, 2022


Tangled | Steve Fendt

Author’s note for this beta read

  • Please go easy on the highlights.
  • Please, please comment! Be as honest as you like.
  • I’m putting all 12 parts up simultaneously. You can use the list at the end to move between parts.
  • Language warning. Plentiful c-words, f-words and other delights await you.

The Convent seemed to have been plucked from northern France and dropped in inner suburban Melbourne. Sal imagined disapproving, wimpled nuns tucked behind the tall, red-brick windows, peeking through the leadlights at the Bacchanalian goings-on below.

Family groups sprawled across green lawns below the austere pebble-dashed façade. Young couples sat, limbs intertwined; shirtless men stepped gingerly between them, clutching more brimming plastic beakers of beer than their brawny arms could safely hold.

Jelka had dragged him along to the gallery, where her friend Lottie’s exhibition was in its second and final week. Sal stalked between the abstract, translucent watercolours and geometric, indigenous-inspired acrylics; stopped occasionally to squint, frown and nod; stifled a yawn; moved on.



Steve Fendt Short stories, serial fiction, memoirs of a possibly quasi-true nature. Stories of the Australian beach and bush.